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Government of Taijitu => The Ecclesia => Proposals and Discussion => Topic started by: Myroria on June 28, 2015, 02:10:23 PM

Title: WFE Update
Post by: Myroria on June 28, 2015, 02:10:23 PM
I think we should update our WFE. While there's nothing wrong with the wonderful job Stone Shark did some time ago on it, I think it could use some updating. My draft is below. Shown is the code for the WFE and a link to a screenshot of how it would look in NS.

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[b]Welcome to the Citizens' Democracy of [url=http://forum.taijitu.org/index.php][color=grey]Taijitu[/color][/url]!

Taijitu is a [color=grey]egalitarian, revolutionary direct democracy and community[/color] that anyone can participate in! To become a citizen, join our [url=http://forum.taijitu.org/][color=black]forums[/color][/url][color=grey] and apply![/color]

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[i]Taijitu's Elected Officers[/i][/b]

[b][color=grey]Citizen-Delegate -[/color][/b] [nation]Myroria[/nation]
[b]Citizen-Initiator -[/b] [nation]Eluvatar[/nation]
[b][color=grey]Citizen-Sergeant -[/color][/b] [nation]Gullivania[/nation]
[b]Citizen-Liaison -[/b] [nation]The True Democracy of America[/nation]

[b]Please endorse Citizen-Delegate [nation=short]Myroria[/nation]!

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• [url=http://client00.chat.mibbit.com/?channel=%23taijitu&server=irc.esper.net][color=black]IRC: #taijitu on EsperNet[/color][/url]
• [color=grey]Join our [/color][url=http://forum.taijitu.org/index.php][color=black]forums![/color][/url]
• [url=http://wiki.taijitu.org/][color=black]Taijitu Wiki[/color][/url]
• Want to fight for [color=grey]democracy and liberation[/color] abroad? Contact Citizen-Sergeant [nation=short]Gullivania[/nation] and ask about joining the [color=grey]Citizens' Militia[/color]![/b]

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[i][b]Vive le Taijitu! Vive la Révolution Glorieuse![/b][/i]

Link to a screenshot of this proposal in-game! (http://imgur.com/WHxQJs8)



Major changes I made are as follows:

Moved links to the bottom, and plugged the wiki and Citizens' Militia.
Added things relevant to our theme - "Long live Taijitu, etc." and "egalitarian, revolutionary direct democracy".
Shortened the list to consist of our elected officials - the Delegate, Initiator, Liaison, and Sergeant.
Added horizontal rules to break up information more neatly.

Ecclesiastical thoughts on this proposal?
Title: Re: WFE Update
Post by: Khem on June 28, 2015, 04:29:54 PM
I like it.
Title: Re: WFE Update
Post by: The Church of Satan on June 29, 2015, 12:12:37 AM
I don't understand why this has to go through the ecclesia. Doesn't the in-game delegate have the authority to change the WFE without being instructed by the legislature?
Title: Re: WFE Update
Post by: Delfos on June 29, 2015, 12:44:02 AM
I don't understand why this has to go through the ecclesia. Doesn't the in-game delegate have the authority to change the WFE without being instructed by the legislature?

Ecclesia rules all.
Title: Re: WFE Update
Post by: Myroria on June 29, 2015, 01:34:40 AM
The Ecclesia previously voted on the last WFE change. Typically the delegate will change the things like the government listings, etc., but precedent dictates any changes to the body of it should be left to the Ecclesia.

I think I ended up removing "join our newly renovated forums" at one point last month, but that's about it.
Title: Re: WFE Update
Post by: AwesomeSaucer on June 29, 2015, 02:41:41 AM
I like it, but I do wish the VotP was still a permanent link.  It's a pretty big deal.

That said, I think it may change quite a bit very soon due to recent and upcoming changes with our community, notably Skype and TeamSpeak.  Make sure to keep that in mind.  ;)
Title: Re: WFE Update
Post by: Gulliver on June 29, 2015, 07:08:19 PM
I like this overall, but I did try making a few corrections and stylistic adjustments. I don't know if I can preview it on my own however  :-X

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[b]Welcome to the Citizens' Democracy of [url=http://forum.taijitu.org/index.php][color=grey]Taijitu[/color][/url]!

Taijitu is an [color=maroon]egalitarian, revolutionary direct democracy and community[/color] that anyone can participate in! To become a citizen, join our [url=http://forum.taijitu.org/][color=grey]forums[/color][/url] and apply!
[hr]

[i]Taijitu's Elected Officers[/i][/b]

[b][color=grey]Citizen-Delegate -[/color][/b] [nation]Myroria[/nation]
[b]Citizen-Initiator -[/b] [nation]Eluvatar[/nation]
[b][color=grey]Citizen-Sergeant -[/color][/b] [nation]Gullivania[/nation]
[b]Citizen-Liaison -[/b] [nation]The True Democracy of America[/nation]

[b]Please endorse Citizen-Delegate [nation=short]Myroria[/nation]!

[hr]

• [url=http://client00.chat.mibbit.com/?channel=%23taijitu&server=irc.esper.net][color=black]IRC: #taijitu on EsperNet[/color][/url]
• [color=grey]Join our [/color][url=http://forum.taijitu.org/index.php][color=black]forums![/color][/url]
• [url=http://wiki.taijitu.org/][color=black]Taijitu Wiki[/color][/url]
• Want to fight for [color=maroon]democracy and liberty[/color]? Contact Citizen-Sergeant [nation=short]Gullivania[/nation] and ask about joining the [color=maroon]Citizens' Militia[/color]![/b]

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[i][b]Vive le Taijitu! Vive la Révolution Glorieuse![/b][/i]

There was an N missing from "an" in "an egalitarian", the first forum link's colors were backwards and I shortened the TaiMil recruitment message slightly. As a stylistic test I tried using maroon for emphasis rather than the gray used for links. Since I haven't previewed this I'm not sure how it looks.

The only thing I could say in addition is maybe a header for the third section in bold italics (like how "Taijitu's elected officers" is) and more content to the list items to match the TaiMil one. Maybe mention of the Ecclesia as well somewhere.
Title: Re: WFE Update
Post by: Myroria on July 01, 2015, 01:20:25 AM
I think your suggestion is much better, Gulliver. Here (https://cdn.pbrd.co/images/1CAChUaA.png) is how it would look in-game.
Title: Re: WFE Update
Post by: Allama on July 01, 2015, 01:40:55 PM
Great draft, Myro! Love the tweaks Gulliver made. I support this WFE change.
Title: Re: WFE Update
Post by: Gulliver on July 02, 2015, 03:27:52 PM
Incidentally, the actual Glorious Revolution (https://fr.wikipedia.org/wiki/Glorieuse_R%C3%A9volution) is apparently one of those French things where the adjective comes first. I don't know if we want to imitate this or be distinct.
Title: Re: WFE Update
Post by: Delfos on July 02, 2015, 03:39:07 PM
tbh it's the same. It's the same in Portuguese. :)

http://french.about.com/od/grammar/a/adjectives_4.htm

in short, adjectives after the noun are descriptive, the car is red type of thing, some adjectives are "qualitative", big fellow (he's not necessarily big), dear girl, glorious hole.

We're fine.
Title: Re: WFE Update
Post by: Myroria on July 06, 2015, 04:28:02 AM
I'll move for a vote on this.
Title: Re: WFE Update
Post by: Funkadelia on July 06, 2015, 05:02:39 AM
I'll move for a vote on this.
I second the motion.
Title: Re: WFE Update
Post by: Myroria on July 13, 2015, 02:24:03 PM
hi Eluvatar :)